The quote from Naruto, and anime show “Growth
occurs when one goes beyond one’s limits, realizing that is also part of
training.”, Taught me to persevere though obstacles and continue when having a
difficult time with them.
Christian, you don't have to put the quote in the thesis itself. You should introduce it earlier in that opening paragraph. Your thesis has a great main action to explore more specifically in your essay--how you have persevered through obstacles. That's a great phrase, a solid idea starter.
I would like to, however, reconsider the phrase " and continue when having a difficult time with them." First of all, that is what perseverance is, right? So that phrase is redundant and can be cut. Second, you can use the rest of the sentence to to instead list a few examples of the types of obstacles you have persevered through--ones that your essay explores further. For example:
The quote has taught me to persevere through obstacles, such as when I first started to _________ and ___________.
I also think you need to pay attention to the idea of "training" in the quote, which is why I added "when I first started" for context. You'd want a phrase like that to show that the obstacles you are going through have been repeated, and that each time you are better at dealing with them.
Those are some great ideas to explore, and I look forward to reading the essay.
Christian, you don't have to put the quote in the thesis itself. You should introduce it earlier in that opening paragraph. Your thesis has a great main action to explore more specifically in your essay--how you have persevered through obstacles. That's a great phrase, a solid idea starter.
ReplyDeleteI would like to, however, reconsider the phrase " and continue when having a difficult time with them." First of all, that is what perseverance is, right? So that phrase is redundant and can be cut. Second, you can use the rest of the sentence to to instead list a few examples of the types of obstacles you have persevered through--ones that your essay explores further. For example:
The quote has taught me to persevere through obstacles, such as when I first started to _________ and ___________.
I also think you need to pay attention to the idea of "training" in the quote, which is why I added "when I first started" for context. You'd want a phrase like that to show that the obstacles you are going through have been repeated, and that each time you are better at dealing with them.
Those are some great ideas to explore, and I look forward to reading the essay.